Ugg the bad writing


Due to the strong acting I enjoyed this movie enough as a formulaic horror movie.

But if you think about it at all, the bad writing is hard to ignore.

There were so many elements that screamed out as being present only as a feeble explanation for some other thing. It's like a lazy committee sat around and came up with quick fixes for problems.

Why is one daughter an fervent animal lover? Oh so we can say she has a pure spirit.

Why do the parents live apart? Oh, so we can have some tension of wondering if the child's behavior is because of parental abuse, or effects of a divorce.

But why would the mother divorce a patient, loving and considerate father? Let's say he's too involved at work.

But we don't want him to be that bad of a guy, since we already included that pure of spirit nonsense from before. OK, let's say that he's a devoted sports coach that comes home late from practice. Great, that will give a reason for him to be divorced, but also still keeping his spirit pure!

How can we justify getting rid of the boyfriend who is by all evidence decent and caring? Have him say something mildly harsh to a demon child ("You're just going to have to get used to it.")

How can we show that both parents are making compromises to reunite and that it's not just the wife coming to her senses? Let's pretend the father takes a pass on a big job offer to stay with his family.

Why is the rabbi exorcist a young guy that listens to cool music on his ipod? Because we signed Matisyahu.

How can we kill off the rabbi? Have hero dad inexplicably give him a car.

Why don't they just start by commanding the demon out, why have all the candles and trivial stuff first? Oh, so we can include a water effect and bump up the running time.

Why does the demon jump over to the dad? Oh so we can include a predictable "surprise" when we think everyone's safe and he gets the devil eyes.

I really don't have a problem with formulaic devil movies, but I would appreciate a bit more respect for the viewer. Have some element where the viewer can put things together for themselves and feel smarter for worrying about the risk.

For example, suppose the ring actually had some purpose, like it was required for the demon to enter and leave the body.

The audience could be tense if they know this, and watch the girl play with the ring a couple times but never wear it, then lose their minds when she finally puts it on. Then the ring could later be lost, and the audience will realize long before the characters do that the demon can't be removed until that ring is found. Not that any of this ring story element is necessarily great, as I just came up with it in two seconds. But it's an example of how you can build tension by having the audience know something and feel clever when they predict or fear things based on that knowledge. Instead, the ring in the movie had exactly zero meaning or purpose. And that same theme could be said of the whole movie.

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You're right. None of that stuff should have happened and... voila!!!! No movie!!

Let us know when and where your brilliant contribution to the cinematic world is debuting so we can all chip away any and all elements of it and render it a non-movie too.

I don't love her.. She kicked me in the face!!

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I'm not sure why you felt the need to respond so dickishly to a perfectly reasonable critique. If you disagree, then just address the points of contention directly.

I mean, sorry for singling you out, but it generally seems like whenever someone simply says "This movie sucks", people bitch about the lack of substance in the critique, but when someone actually bothers to thoroughly articulate their position, they get sh't like this.

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Honestly? It's been MANY months since I wrote that but in reading what I responded to, it doesn't really seem like a reasonable critique. He/she deconstructed the vast majority of the elements of a work of fiction, leaving basically nothing left. Anyone can do that and the result is no story to tell.

I don't love her.. She kicked me in the face!!

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Please list a few horror flicks that you feel have much better writing for comparison.

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"Why does the demon jump over to the dad? Oh so we can include a predictable "surprise" when we think everyone's safe and he gets the devil eyes."


In the Bible, Jesus - a peripatetic Rabbi - casts some demons (a collection that refer to themselves as 'Legion' when Jesus, following Jewish tradition, extracts the name to use over them) out of a man. The demons (always seeking embodiment) implored him to be allowed to enter a heard of pigs nearby, and he granted permission.

In the film, the demon jumped from Emily to her father because of the looming threat of exorcism, and the father had been repeating over and over again that it could take him (permission). It wasn't a perfect plan, but it was the route the demon took at the time, trying to stay embodied instead of being cast back into the box again.

The demon was able to be in Emily and at times and remain undetected. It probably planned to try and escape in the father this way, but the Rabbi used its name to force it to reveal itself, and the jig was up.




'Then' and 'than' are completely different words and have completely different meanings.

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