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The Civil War - Illinois Style


I just spent the last 8 months painfully writing a Civil War movie script. So Far there have been no buyers. And all who have looked at it have returned it to me, although Dreamworks did keep thier copy. So wish me Luck.

the name of my script is "Ashes of Illinois"

the story was easy to write, and I dont mind sharing the plot with you.

It's about a guy named Dave who is a petty thief and heavy pot smoker who lives on the streets of old Chicago. He joins the army as a way to hide from the law and get away from Chicago. While in the army, he sees several battles that cause him to break down mentally. Suffering from shell shock, He deserts the army and flees to go live in the flat lands (farming area)of south west Illinois(near the mississippi river). After living alone for many months in a small house, he keeps remembering the battles and begins to loose his mind. Following a series a voilent nightmares about the war,and he re-sights an old bible verse that says that it is better to cut off your right hand than to sin with it, and since he used his right hand to pull the trigger and killed people. He goes crazy and chops off his right hand and throws it into the mississippii river(remember the war has made him crazy. - somehow he convinced himself that cutting off his hand would make the memories and dreams stop. - But it doesn't. (((I wrote some great scenes than depict him going crazy, where he starts shaking all over, breaking out in cold sweats and then shuts himself up in his bedroom closet and talking to himself in different voices, and one of the voices is suppossed to be God)))And then he starts blaming God for everything, and then he plans to get his revenge on God. It ends on a sunday morning with him shooting up a bunch of opium and riding to a nearby town, entering a church on sunday morning and he open fires into the crowd of people attending worship service. And someone shoots him.


This should be an oscar movie.... I'll keep you posted

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Right on and good luck. I loved Outlaw Josey Wales as well as Ride with the Devil.....

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And what in the world does smoking pot and shooting opium have to do with the Civil War? If this does get to the screen I won't bother seeing it, but thanks for the advance warning so I don't waste my money on it.

Palin/Jindal 2012

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I think pot keeps your mind "loose" before you "lose" it.

Spell check can't fix everything.

"Save me Jebus!", Homer Simpson

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Weedeater:

Your description, particularly the ending, makes me glad I read this as it saves me the experience of actually watching were it to ever be made, which it won't, for no other reason than your mistake of blabbing the entire premise on an internet forum. For legal reasons, no production company would touch this script with anything less than the very shredder Dreamworks used to save themselves the postage of returning it to you.

(Cynical endings make me sick. I'll stick with Ride with the Devil.)


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You're kidding, right?

If the script is as poorly written as your post, I can understand it being returned.

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Wow.
Don't forget the scene where he smokes 50 bong-hits and writes a script about the Civil War in Illinois.

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My first suggestion would be to SpellCheck your script, but I'm afraid even that won't help with your misunderstanding of basic words ("re-sight").

But the bigger question you need to ask yourself is why anyone would want to see the movie you propose.

I'm sorry to be so snarky-sounding. But even highly educated people who are already excellent writers and who have spent years creating and polishing a well thought out screenplay with a dynamic plotline, and deeply felt and interesting characters, can spend 15 years in Hollywood trying to get someone to believe in their script. You have a very long way to go before you can even shop a script. First you need to learn basic rules of grammar, spelling and syntax. Then you need to spend a few years learning how to write clearly and effectively, and practicing that. Then, and only then, should you start the script-writing.

You've got a minimum of 5 years of remedial work to do. But there's nothing to stop you other than you. Good luck.

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Haha, nice one, you actually tricked a few. I live in Southwestern Illinois.

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I'll bet Nathan Lane would be up for starring in the musical version. Maybe change it to Vietnam, like that hasn't already been done to death.

"It ain't dying I'm talking about, it's LIVING!"
Captain Augustus McCrae

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