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OT : Im Writing A Novel. Would love any feedback


Im in the process of writing this book based on my summer. Wanna hear what I have so far ?


2 side notes (this girl never came after me cause I told her and Sasha I like a friend of theirs(minnie) . Who came to the Vallima but she is really seedi saadi type. An I really suck at talking to girls.So I never really made things happen with herCryCryCry. Second sidenote is Sasha/Anna have a cousin "Jess" that Roger use to date. Roger claims it was all booty calls and what not and he saw her 30 times in 3 years. "Jess" was kinda in love with him to the point that at the engagement party 2 years ago she almost made a scene.

In July my family went to Texas and my brother Alex got married. Then her (Sasha's) family came to NYC for Vallima. After Vallima we all went out to rooftop lounge/night club. This girl Anna (brides younger sister) got hammered and started crying and grabbing/Feeling people and asked them not to leave her. It was *beep* crazy. We went back to hotel and put her to sleep. Then few days after Vallima. My one single cousin(Vince) , 2 single friends (Dylan and Roger) and one married couple (my cousin and his wife Frank/Michelle) all got messages through text , FB, and even on instagram saying stuff like she never drinks and she hopes no one judges her. Then she starts really texting Vince hardcore all the time . Like at random times. Hes like anything you wanna know lol. I say well see if I have any chance with Minnie lol. Anna apparently tells him she is a gold digger and would prefer none of us got with her . LOLLOLLOL She also texts the married couple she wants to visit them. She then sends snaps of her doing squats to Vince ShockedShocked. Im in Florida while all this happening with Dylan and Roger at Roger's sister wedding. I take some photo with Roger's sister and I get a text from the girl saying tell her I said congrats. I like an idiots say it in front of a few people. Then Roger smirks. Apparently Anna is also hitting him up but he is just kinda ignoring it lol. A few days later I guess Vince started ignoring her so she really hits up Roger on snap and apparently sends him snap of her at pillates ShockedShocked. Dylan sees it and thats where he tells me she also kinda hit him up. IM like where is she getting all these phone numbers lol. All of them claim they never gave it to her. I just think she misses her sister and wants to be friendly with us. But then throughout the week she hitting everyone up. Roger keeps texting me "yo bro she want me" . I was like then talk to her or ignore her what you want from me lol. He calls me and says yo IM on the phone with her right now. She is hammered as *beep* Borderline their having phonesex. He dials me in and keeps me on mute. I listen to their whole conversation. 3 Hours yo. Ok so yeah the 3 hour phone call. Yeah Anna is drunk and she is being all flirty and talking *beep* about her family. She didnt think Jess got Roger and all that and thats Jess is just butt hurt etc. . Roger brings up other girls he can date and she has reasons they all suck LOLLOL. Im kinda getting bored so I message Roger im gonna goto sleep. He says nah bro she is hammered anything you wanna know. I said slip in Minnie's name and see if I have a chance with her. Anna says she doesnt have heart to tell me Minnie is chalak and Tezz. Im like she talks this much *beep* about her why are they friends. But anyway she sobers up at 7 am and they hang up. Then Roger is like dude W*F. Im like bro just ignore her shes crazy. Thats where im like *beep* it. Its one thing if she liked one of my friends but she is playing some sort of game. So I just tell Roger and Vince in a 3 way text about this. They agree to phase her out. That night she is snapping , texting and calling both of them saying she needs them. Claiming she is having panic attacks and *beep* Sending very weird photos. Then next day this *beep* continues. An they send me screen shots of her weird texts. Boy this is crazy as *beep* I think they both block her. Then she hits up Dylan asking for his number lmao and now she is drunk texting him. He hits me up I say just ignore it. But then I try and experiment. I text her about something and she is replying correct with no spelling errors or *beep* Im like is she faking being drunk ??? Cause the 3 hour phone call I could tell she was 100 % drunk . Maybe she is faking the texting. Thats where we are for now.

That is the basis of my novel. Im gonna change a few things of course and I need more material but that is like the first half atleast

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You are writing a novel without paragraphs? That's unusual, you might have discovered the next big trend in literature....

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Don't quit your day job.

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There's hope. Self publishing and all.

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I would never want to discourage anyone, but this is obviously a joke, right?

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You are writing a novel without paragraphs? That's unusual, you might have discovered the next big trend in literature....

Or actual grammar.

Couldn't get past the first three sentences, it was unreadable.

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On the discouragement thing, that's an interesting question. If someone is wanting to write a book that their friends and family might want to read or do just write a book and see what happens, I see no problem with that.

If someone who is obviously an unskilled writer with very little experience starts writing a novel that they want to be published, I would say there are better ways in which they could develop and improve their writing style before committing to that, as their chances of success are as close to zero as possible otherwise.

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seriously guys, don't be so ignorant. this guy is on drugs. some kind of stimulant, probably amphetamine or methylphenidate. he is f$ked up. He was probably working on a college paper and took too much, went into semi psychosis, and started writing a bunch of psychobabble down and thought it was a good idea to post here.

It's pretty funny, though.

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He's the new László Krasznahorkai.

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